There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making temperature higher. What might be the man-made causes of temperature rising?
Currently, the temperature
are
increasing frequently Change the verb form
is
in
all over the world by Change preposition
apply
the
human activity . Correct article usage
apply
Moreover
some Add a comma
Moreover,
bossom
evidence has been seen that it may Correct your spelling
blossom
causes
Change the verb form
cause
harmful
impact on the atmosphere. In Add an article
a harmful
this
essay, I will intend to analyze a few reasons, such
as,
burning fossil fuels and deforestation in upcoming paragraphs.
Commencing with the first impede of rising Remove the comma
apply
temprature
by communities is Correct your spelling
temperature
temperatures
that
logging of Correct determiner usage
the
forest
for different Fix the agreement mistake
forests
purpose
. Fix the agreement mistake
purposes
To begin
with, recently , humankind are
cutting Wrong verb form
has been
the
wood frequently asCorrect article usage
apply
infrastrucre
Correct your spelling
infrastructure
are decorating
Wrong verb form
is being decorated
by
wood and making Change preposition
with
stylist
furniture for their home Correct your spelling
stylish
as a result
climate changes can boost such
as droughts, floods and other disasters that cause displacement to whole
society. Add an article
the whole
For instance
, In United
Correct article usage
the United
states
, scientists have figured out Capitalize word
States
most
of Correct word choice
that most
provinces
where heat level are Add an article
the provinces
continuosusly
highest than others Correct your spelling
continuously
due to
that less raining
are Replace the word
rain
occuring
and living things either sea or Correct your spelling
occurring
earth
have been Change preposition
on earth
destroying
continuously.
Wrong verb form
destroyed
Secondly
, if i
talk about the other reason Change the capitalization
I
of
the higher stage of heating power is Change preposition
for
that
by burning fossil fuels in the atmosphere. To commence with, if greenhouse gas Correct word choice
apply
level
escalate in the environment Fix the agreement mistake
levels
consequently
nitrogen level
will hike Fix the agreement mistake
levels
that
will Correct pronoun usage
which
contibute
Correct your spelling
contribute
the
formation of smog and acid rain since masses are using cars and Change preposition
to the
truck
that leads to population Fix the agreement mistake
trucks
influnces
in the surroundings. Correct your spelling
influences
influence
Therefore
, when smog will escalate due to
this
health problems may occur in particularly elder age people.
For example
, In the 20th century , people prefer
to start their not only personal transport but Wrong verb form
preferred
also
public transpost
because of busy Correct your spelling
transport
lifestyle
but that Fix the agreement mistake
lifestyles
are causing
environment Wrong verb form
caused
hence
, mortality rate
are inflating continuously .
Fix the agreement mistake
rates
To sum up
, even though social activity is play
a vital role in every Change the verb form
plays
folks
life, it can be changed by doing other Change noun form
person's
solution
in everyday life. Fix the agreement mistake
solutions
Therefore
, deforestation can be solved as well
as
emitting fossil fuel by Correct word choice
and
the
Correct article usage
apply
car
may Fix the agreement mistake
cars
be mitigate
by using battery vehicles in Change the verb form
be mitigated
every day
life .Replace the word
everyday
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