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The average prices per kilometre of clothing imported into the European Union from six different countries in 1993 and 2003 are shown in the bar chart below.

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per kilometre of clothing prices among six different countries which imported into the Europen Union in 1993 and 2003. Units are given in pounds.
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, clothing prices saw changes between years, except
Brazil
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. Some country’s exporting
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 nearly doubled when
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 with the previous year. In 2003, Argentina and Japan sold their per kilometre of clothing to
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Europe less expensive than
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 with 27€ and 15€ respectively. Meanwhile,
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tekstile
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textile
 industry protected the price in both years
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 23€ which is less than Argentina but higher than Brazil.
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, Bangladesh imported
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 clothing unit to Europe with less than 5€ in 1993,
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 it reached
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nearly 6€ in 2003.
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, Chinese and Indian companies faced
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price increases after 10
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approximately
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 more than 7€. Chinese industry saw the biggest rise in
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exporting prices between 1993 and 2003
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from 10€ to 17€.
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