Some people believe governments should spend money in saving languages of few speakers from dying out completely. Others think this is a waste of financial resources. Discuss both views and give your opinion
Some say that governments need to use more funds to maintain tongues that are only spoken by a small number of
people
, while
others would argue that is
a waste of capital. This
essay would argue that although
is part of history
, there are more important activities that need large amounts of financial resources.
On the one hand, all languages have a history
, from where they come from, how they were created and who talked these languages. This
is all learned in history
classes, but if a language disappears, then
part of the culture of that place will have vanished, so the descendants will not know about it, and have less knowledge about their nation. For example
, China has lots of dialects, but since a large number of Chinese people
are immigrating to other countries, their kids do not know how to speak the dialect, if this
continues happening, then
, after several years it will be forgotten by the individuals. However
, I believe that there are other solutions such
as teaching others about the language, so more people
know it and speak it.
On the other hand
, the planet is facing some important problems that need to be solved, such
as global warming, climate change and contamination. This
is because if answers to these problems are not found, then
all living things will be in danger, but looking for solutions, research and experiments need to be done, so a lot of money is needed. Recent research concluded that in 2020 around half of the experiments on climate change were stopped because of a lack of resources, so they couldn’t continue working. I believe this
point of view is preferable because people
’s lives are more important.
In conclusion, although
the culture and history
of a region might be forgotten, there are problems that affect all the people
in the world that are more urgent and need financial resources, and that is
why it is more important to use the funds for these activities.Submitted by elenazheng1211 on
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