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23.The chart below shows spending on health among three different countries between 1990 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

23.The chart below shows spending on health among three different countries between 1990 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The graph displays the money used in health in
Japan
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, Italy and
France
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 from 1990 to 2010.
Overall
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, all three countries increased their spending over the
years
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,
while
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Japan
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 had a waste of many times greater than any other country in all
five
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years
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. The other significant feature of
this
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 graph is that
France
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 has risen sharply its value in the
last
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 5
years
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.
Japan
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 had a waste of 8
billion
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 dollars in 1990 double that of Italy in second place, which only had a waste of just under $4
billion
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. Italy’s value was twice as much as the lowest in 1990, namely
France
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, which only had a GDP of just $2
billion
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. In 1995
Japan
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 grew by $1
billion
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,
while
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 Italy doubled in
five
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years
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 and
France
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 climbed to just above $3
billion
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.
Japan
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 increased its payout to approximately $13
billion
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 in 2000, but Italy and
France
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 dropped moderately to $6
billion
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 and $2
billion
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 respectively. In the next
five
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years
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,
Japan
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 decreased modestly to $12
billion
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, Italy jumped to $9
billion
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 and
France
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 remained stable. In the
last
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 year of the period
Japan
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 rocketed by $2
billion
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 compared to 2005, Italy rose significantly to $10
billion
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,
finally
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,
France
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 is
five
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 times greater than in 2005.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, france, years, five, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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