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Results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

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The chart illustrates five Australian cities that were surveyed by researchers about
people
’s habits for drinking and buying
coffee
 and
tea
.
Overall
, the graph shows different habits in five cities in Australia that can appear the most in every single city
people
 went to
cafe
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a cafe
the cafe
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 for
coffee
 or
tea
 in
last
Correct article usage
the last
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 4 weeks except Adelaide city which has the most bought instant
coffee
 in
last
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the last
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 4 weeks.
In addition
, five cities in Australia’s graph
exhibit
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exhibits
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 the lowest
people
 habits is bought fresh
coffee
 in
last
 4 weeks. As is presented in
bar
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the bar
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 graph
people
went
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who went
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 to cafe for
coffee
 or
tea
 has
average
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an average
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around
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of around
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 45-65%. Mostly
who
Correct pronoun usage
they
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 prefer to
goto
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go to
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cafe
Fix the agreement mistake
cafes
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at
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in
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 Melbourne and Hobart.
Rephrase
Similarly
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likewise
Add a comma
likewise,
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people
 who bought fresh
tea
has
Wrong verb form
had
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minimum
Correct article usage
a minimum
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around
Change preposition
of around
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 35%
at
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in
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 Brisbane.
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