The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less. The table show these causes affected three regions of world during the 1990s.
The
given
pie chart provides information about the Verb problem
apply
percentage
of four factors that causes
less Correct subject-verb agreement
cause
productive
of agricultural Replace the word
productivity
land
, while
the given table illustrates the proportion
of three
factors that affected three
regions of the world during the 1990s.
Overall
, over-grazing have
the biggest Change the verb form
has
proportion
about
the Change preposition
of
causes
of agricultural land
becomes
less productive Wrong verb form
becoming
while
the other is the lowest. In addition
, Europe had the highest percentage
of three
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the three
causes
of land
degradation while
North America had the lowest percentage
except for over-cultivation
.
To begin
with, over-grazing is the main factor on why agricultural land
becomes less productive. It takes 35% of all reasons. Next,
28% of that phenomenon is caused by over-cultivation
. Deforestation
takes 30% of the causes
on
less productive Change preposition
of
of
agricultural Change preposition
apply
land
. 7% of other factors also
contribute on
less productive agricultural Change preposition
to
land
.
In Europe, deforestation
, over-cultivation
, and over-grazing ware
always Correct your spelling
were
took
the highest Verb problem
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proportion
of the causes
of land
degradation compared to the other two countries. The percentage
were 9.8%, 7.7%, and 5.5% for deforestation
, over-cultivation
, and over-grazing respectively with total
number was 23%. Oceania Add an article
the total
a total
also
had the same problem with
Europe except for Change preposition
as
over-cultivation
. Deforestation
and over-grazing took 1.7% and 11.3% respectively on that phenomenon while
over-cultivation
took 0%. The total number of that destruction was 13%. Lastly
, in North America, the three
reasons on
that phenomenon took the lowest Change preposition
for
proportion
except for the over-cultivation
. The percentage
was 0.2% for deforestation
, 3.3% for over-cultivation
, and 1.5% for over-grazing with total
number was 5%.Add an article
the total
a total
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