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The three pie chart illustrate how an expenditure by local authorities changed in Someland between 1980 and 2000

The three pie chart illustrate how an expenditure by local authorities changed in Someland between 1980 and 2000
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The three pie chart
illustrate
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 how
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expenditure by local authorities changed in Someland between 1980 and 2000. It is clear, that the
expences
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expenses
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 for Higher education
is
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are
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 a lot more than other
expences
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expenses
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.
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, in 1980
a
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spending on
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higher education
35
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% and it is the vast
mojority
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majority
,
also
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the spending rose to almost half of all, and only in 2000 decreased slightly to 40
percents
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per cent
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. The second item of
expens
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expense
 in 1980 was k-12 education, but in the next
decade
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 k-12 caught up
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with helth
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helth
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health
 and human resources. the both were equal to twenty
percents
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percent
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. at the
begininning
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beginning
 of the millennium the second place got
a
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transportation
item
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 with 22%, in 1980 it was sixteen, but in the nineties declined hardly by more than half. The smallest expenditure by local authorities were the
enviromental
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environmental
 services and the others. the
enviromental
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environmental
 services grew gradually from four in the eighties to nine in 2000.
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 a result,
rise
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of
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 all
expens
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expense
expenses
 reduced the
others item
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 to a tiny minority - 1% and it
is
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 the lowest level for the entire period.
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, the volume of all remains approximately the same.
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