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The presented information describes the differences between two maps of Denham town over the period of 37 years from 1986 to the present day.

The presented information describes the differences between two maps of Denham town over the period of 37 years from 1986 to the present day.
The presented information describes the differences between two maps of Denham town over the period of 37 years from 1986 to the present day. It can be clearly seen that the number of houses increased significantly,
meanwhile
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 farmland disappeared completely. It could be noticed that
main
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the main
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 buildings of the town Large
house
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houses
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 with gardens fully changed. The house
rebuild
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was rebuilt
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 as a Retirement home and
instead
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 of
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a garden
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garden
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garden,
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there
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it
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upbuild
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built
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 some houses. The amount of houses has grown along the main road and small roads
that
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apply
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have been added in some places. Miner
structure
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structures
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 like
post
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the post
a post
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office
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offices
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, shops and
primary
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the primary
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school
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schools
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were
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also
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 modified except
of
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for
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first
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the first
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 one. Shops
removed
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were removed
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 and primary
school
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schools
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 rose in size.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "presented" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
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