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The crime rates nowadays are decreasing compared to the past due to advance technology which can prevent and solve crime. Do you agree or disagree?

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Due to
 evolving technology, it is said that the amount of crimes
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 been lessened compared to the numbers we have in the past. I disagree with
this
 notion, because with the number of killings and stealings
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 happening at the moment around the world, no surveillance cameras and smartphones have evidently stopped these wrongdoings,
in contrast
 in the past, it has gone to worse. Nowadays, despite being filmed by many people, youngsters nonchalantly stab random strangers because of boredom. Even though they are broadcasted all over the world, the lack of education and weak punishments from law, will not stop these young people from doing
such
 acts. It appears to me that if the government would not bestow heavier
sunctions
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sanctions
functions
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 to young criminals in today's time,
such
 as imprisonment, they will not understand the weight of stabbing someone and losing their lives. Another reason why I believe that technology,
such
 as CCTV is not as effective in reducing the rates of crime is because supermarkets in many places are declaring to experience losses in profit because of shoplifters.
This
 is a familiar scene in Melbourne, Victoria, wherein Woolworths, one of the popular supermarkets, have police in their
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 counters.
This
 is because criminals still manage to steal items despite the cameras
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 each counter. In conclusion,
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the advancement of technology provided security and records on people in various ways compared
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 the past. In my opinion, it did not specifically
reduced
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 the crime rates as
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to
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 the increasing numbers of
stabbing
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stabbings
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 of children and shoplifting incidents in many food centres.
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