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some people think that it is beneficial to travel abroad, but others think it is unnecessary because we have the Internet and TV. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #travel #internet #tv
One may argue that travelling abroad benefits themselves. The reasons may be listed as follows.
First,
travelling abroad enables travellers
feel
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 and appreciate the landscapes and nature in person.
Second,
what is more important is that
people
 can understand the culture of that country, namely the customs,
people
's identities,
people
's ideology and stuff, which is certainly good for
people
 in nowadays gobalizationalized context.
However
, some may disagree with the aforementioned
arguement
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argument
 because they think media is sufficient enough. For one thing, there are various photos and documentaries about different places
of
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in
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 the world. For another, nowadays we have a lot of
people
 document their
life
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lives
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 by making vlogs and so on, making the audience experience their life visually and verbally. From my perspective, each point of view has its value.
Neverthless
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Nevertheless
, I prefer the former opinion.
Firstly
, everyone's perception is different. One may gain his or her own distinctive feelings
while
 he or
her
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get
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 into the place.
Secondly
, though social media makes our
life
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 more
convenience
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, it is convinced that the information it
spread
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 is not absolutely real.
Therefore
, the better way
for
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to
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 correct understanding should be getting in touch
of
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with
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 the destinations by oneself.
Last
 but not least,
due to
 the differences among countries' soft power,
people
 may not know every country comprehensively online,
while
 going abroad will not make
this
 obstacle.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • opportunity
  • exposure
  • cultural diversity
  • explore
  • immersive experience
  • language proficiency
  • intercultural communication
  • networking
  • global perspective
  • adaptability
  • experience new things
  • broaden horizons
  • virtual resources
  • convenience
  • accessibility
  • information overload
  • virtual reality
  • face-to-face interaction
  • personal connections
  • empathy
  • appreciation
  • unique
  • memorable
  • transformative
  • educational
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