The chart below shows the results of a survey into the causes of poor school attendance in the UK in 2007.

The chart below shows the results of a survey into the causes of poor school attendance in the UK in 2007.
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The pie chart
illustates
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illustrates
the reasons for
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leave
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schools in the UK in 2007. The figures measure in per cent.
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both parents working
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the main reason, Upbringing was the least.
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parents were the main reason
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children's
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attend
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their
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and Lack of School
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discipline
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the second. The former accounted
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and the
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was 25 per cent. Both peer group pressure and bullying were exactly
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at 15
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upbringing
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accounted for 5. It was exactly
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of bullying and peer group pressure.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • attendance
  • survey
  • causes
  • parental involvement
  • bullying
  • safety concerns
  • academic performance
  • motivation
  • physical health
  • mental health
  • support
  • resources
  • students
  • peer pressure
  • influence
  • school environment
  • curriculum
  • transportation issues
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