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The map and chart below show the information for the global willingness to eat insect products and the current price for certain food available on the market place. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map and chart below show the information for the global willingness to eat insect products and the current price for certain food available on the market place. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given map and chart delineates the details
for
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 the global willingness to consume product from insects and the
amount
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 of certain foods available at the market. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that Mexico is the country that consume the highest
amount
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 of
those kind
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that kind
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 of eatable as compared to any
disticnt
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distinct
nation
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. In Mexico,
people
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 eating
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insect products account for 71%. In
this
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nation
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 percentage of humans who willingly
eats
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 them
are
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 more than the percentage who do not want to eat insects.
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nation
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 is followed by Peru,
counting
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 for 58%, and the willingness is similar to Mexico. 56% of men and women
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the
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Thailand consume these products and
people
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 willingly eating are more than
people
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 who are eating
unwillingy
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unwillingly
unwilling
. Brazil and China have
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amount
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 of
people
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 eating insects product, amounting
for
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 45% and 44% respectively. South Africa is
also
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 an intermediate insect consumer
nation
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 with 39%, in which
people
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 who are unwilling to eat these are of greater
amount
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then
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than
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 willingly eating
people
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. Japan have the least
amount
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 of human beings who eat
these product
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this product
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,
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 only 21%.
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 Russia
have
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 32%, India and Spain have similar digits of consumers, which is 33% and The USA have 35%.
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 Kingdom
have
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 36% of consumers for insect products. In all these nations,
population
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the population
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 who are eating it
unwilling
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unwillingly
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 is less than
people
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 who are eating willingly.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, nation, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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