In order for the world to be a ‘greener’ place, punishment and fines for environmentally unfriendly acts committed by individuals need to be more severe. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Giving more severe punishments and
fines
for individuals who harm our nature is one of the solutions to keep our world greener. I believe that increasing
fines
to a higher amount and applying longer duration of
jail
punishments could increase
people
’s awareness of keeping green.
To begin
with, increasing the number of
fines
would be more effective to prevent
people
from misconduct towards their environment. The reason is money plays a valuable role in
the
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society, especially
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is earned with toil and sacrifice, so they do not want to lose it solely to pay
fines
.
Moreover
, setting a low level of
fines
will reduce the urgency of the rules.
People
would easily disobey it since they can afford the
fines
.
For example
, Indonesians tend to pay for plastic bags from the minimarket rather than bring their environmentally friendly eco-bag. In my opinion,
this
rule is not effective at all since the punishment of giving Rp 2,000 additional charge is too cheap.
Additionally
, more severe punishments like longer duration in
jail
would be the best idea to encourage
people
to obey the rules.
This
would affect their career life since some companies need a letter of evidence that
people
are free from misconduct behaviour, especially from
jail
.
Moreover
, it should be supported by the law to be more strict and fairer to the suspect.
For instance
,
people
will
considerate
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to
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not
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in the river since the punishment of being jailed
is clearly come
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to their mind. In conclusion, setting a higher number of
fines
will make
people
think twice
of
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their behaviour. It could be a big companion if longer
jail
is
also
implemented to create a greener world in an effective way.
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