in a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these vlews and give your own opinion.

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Citizens of some countries consider it should spend a large number of money on building
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on improving the existing public transportation systems. Some may say the
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is the most efficient
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to get to another city, some
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it is too costly. To start with,
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high speed
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is the best option for
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between
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certain
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distance
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. The older public transportation options like
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or
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are relatively low
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to the high-speed
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, by the
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,
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can travel between
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more efficiently.
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with a new option for
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to travel around, fewer
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will choose to drive their own car for longer
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the carbon dioxide that emits
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and eventually slows the speed of global warming.
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, building
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for
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trains is very costly
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to improving existing public transportation options. The cost of building
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may not
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off, so it may make government waste money on
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expensive project of building a
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.
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, the
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convenience
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as
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expected. In some
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, it is hard to find a perfect area to build a new train station, so the new
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system will become
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,
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is
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a faster
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to travel between
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, and it is good for
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down the speed of global warming.
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, it is very costly, and sometimes hard to find a suitable place to build a new train station for it. In my opinion, I think building a new
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system is a better option.
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