In order for the world to be a ‘greener’ place, punishment and fines for environmentally unfriendly acts committed by individuals need to be more severe. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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and other particles in the atmosphere

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is one of the most contributed chemicals which stimulates higher

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should be committed to reduce the

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. It is still a big obstacle

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. Many policies created to reduce the rate of

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. Some expert groups said that we should give harsher punishment to offenders of the green policy.

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, I do think that giving harsher punishment or increasing fines to the companies who contribute a lot

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will not be an effective way. In order to reduce the

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of

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, we should do more collective

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is not only the responsibility of governments, but all the components should work hand in hand to tackle

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issue. Collective action is the most important thing that should be achieved at the very first time. All the collective

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will make the green movement get bigger and get

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society. Some

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still do not care about the issue because they think that it is impossible for us to achieve the

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. In my opinion, in order to

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more

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's awareness we should start education from scratch. We start from our own family, we tell and show

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our children to prioritize using tumblers or reduce the tendency to use

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vehicles. These simple

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will give massive

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and

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collective awareness that every single one of us is responsible

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green and comfortable to live in. The next thing is to

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literacy

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in society.

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is not only limited to the

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to read

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writing

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to do analysis and take the best decision from each circumstance.

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on global warming issues should be improved by giving more education and

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empathy. To achieve better

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we should educate

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to choose good information and ignore hoaxes.

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to think logically should be embraced by everyone. When they have

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, they will not become too easily provoked by any hoax or information that says global warming is a conspiracy. It is crystal clear that the more

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realize

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of

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global warming issues. In conclusion, the goal to reduce

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will not be achieved if we only rely on government

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. All the components should take part in tackling

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issue. Increasing collective awareness and reducing

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who are illiterate

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global warming issues can be the solutions to combat the negative impact of global warming

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