In order for the world to be a ‘greener’ place, punishment and fines for environmentally unfriendly acts committed by individuals need to be more severe. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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the temperature on

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Carbon

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is one of the most contributed chemicals which stimulates higher

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. The curative and prevention

actions

should be committed to reduce the

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dioxide

on the

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. It is still a big obstacle

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this

chemical on

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. Many policies created to reduce the rate of

carbon

emission

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. Some expert groups said that we should give harsher punishment to offenders of the green policy.

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, I do think that giving harsher punishment or increasing fines to the companies who contribute a lot

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will not be an effective way. In order to reduce the

amount

of

carbon

dioxide

, we should do more collective

actions

.

This

is not only the responsibility of governments, but all the components should work hand in hand to tackle

this

issue. Collective action is the most important thing that should be achieved at the very first time. All the collective

actions

will make the green movement get bigger and get

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society. Some

people

still do not care about the issue because they think that it is impossible for us to achieve the

goals

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for

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free

carbon

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. In my opinion, in order to

increase

more

people

's awareness we should start education from scratch. We start from our own family, we tell and show

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our children to prioritize using tumblers or reduce the tendency to use

fuel cell

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vehicles. These simple

actions

will give massive

actions

and

increase

collective awareness that every single one of us is responsible

to keep

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our

earth

green and comfortable to live in. The next thing is to

increase

literacy

in society.

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is not only limited to the

ability

to read

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writing

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but it is

also

related to the

ability

to do analysis and take the best decision from each circumstance.

People

's

literacy

on global warming issues should be improved by giving more education and

actions

to

increase

empathy. To achieve better

literacy

,

firstly

we should educate

people

to choose good information and ignore hoaxes.

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to think logically should be embraced by everyone. When they have

this

ability

, they will not become too easily provoked by any hoax or information that says global warming is a conspiracy. It is crystal clear that the more

people

realize

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taking positive

actions

, the lesser

amount

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of

carbon

dioxide

on the

earth

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surface

.

This

happens because

people

will be wiser to make decisions when they are literate enough about

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global warming issues. In conclusion, the goal to reduce

carbon

dioxide

emission

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will not be achieved if we only rely on government

actions

. All the components should take part in tackling

this

issue. Increasing collective awareness and reducing

people

who are illiterate

to

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global warming issues can be the solutions to combat the negative impact of global warming

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then

.