The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected these regions of the world the 1990s

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected these regions of the world the 1990s
The chart presents the main causes of agricultural soil
becomes
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becoming
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less productive. The table depicts how these issues impacted
three
different countries of the world in the 90's.
Overall
, there were
three
main reasons for land degradation
such
as over-grazing,
deforestation
, and over-cultivation. Whilst, among the
three
regions, the most affected was Europe, at 23%.
To begin
, less than one in twenty, 0,2%, soil was degraded by the highest rate of
deforestation
in North America.
Then
, the percentage of 3.3% caused by over-cropping and 1.5% because of over-grazing.
On the other hand
, in Oceania, the biggest percentages were in over-grazing, at 11.3% over
three
main problems. A small percentage of 1.7% is affected by
deforestation
. Europe was the most encountered nation with the highest percentages at 23%. Looking at details, the significant increase in
deforestation
was the main factor why the ground in Europe became degraded. The second issue is people start
cropping-off threes
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cropping off trees
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in enormous percentages, at 7.7%.
Lastly
, more than 5% of degradation
affected
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is affected
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by over-grazing.
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