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The table shows the amount of spent on healthcare in different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and recording the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The table shows the amount of spent on healthcare in different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and recording the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
The bar graph Illustrates, the expenditure
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of
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computers
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 and
smartphones
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 in a particular country from 2011 to 2015.
Overall
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, it can be seen from the chart that,
although
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sale
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sales
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 of both
computers
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 and
smartphones
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 increased,
smartphones
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'
sales
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 skyrocketed in the given period of time.
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 with,
the
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 first 3 years only 10
million
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sales
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 happened in terms of
smartphones
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while
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computers
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 sold three items higher than
its
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 counterparts
I
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in
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 the initial year.
Then
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,
next
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the next
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 year it reached 35
million
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 and in 2013, the
sales
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 touched 40
million
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 in the country.
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, in 2014, there was considerable
increasment
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increase
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sales
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in sales
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on
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smartphones
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 compared with previous years. To be precise, 30
million
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. When it comes to 2015,
differences
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the differences
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 between
smartphones
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 and
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computers sale
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computer sales
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 became less. The former was around 45
million
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,
whereas
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 the latter was exactly 50
million
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words computers, smartphones, sales, million with synonyms.
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