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The diagram below shows the process of making a violin by hand. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process of making a violin by hand. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the
process
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 of making a
violoinby
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violin by
violin
 hand.
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,
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Violin
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the Violin
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 is made by hand through different
parts
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 and
througfor
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throughout
h
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the
process
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.
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Violin
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The violin
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 is been structured beautifully. The
process
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 starts with
the
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apply
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cutting the wood into
the
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a
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 thin piece using
saw
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a saw
the saw
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. The wood is been divided into two
parts
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they
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the
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are
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apply
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back and
front
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part
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parts
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. By using the
front
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part
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 F-hole is been
desgined
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designed
. The fourth
process
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 by using the
front
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part
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 making
bass
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a bass
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 bar in
te
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the
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front
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part
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.
Next,
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handle
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the handle
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 of
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violin
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the violin
a violin
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 is made with the heating
the
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apply
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tool, shaped rib and two unshaped rib strips are used. With the help of glue both the
parts
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 are fixed and ribs are
also
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 used for fixing
body
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the body
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 of the
violin
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.
Next,
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the handle is made the scroll and for safety handling neck is fixed and
body
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the body
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 of
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violin
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the violin
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 is ready. The
parts
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 are fixed properly and the
violin
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 is assembled properly. The additional
parts
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 are given for fixing in
violin
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 if needed. They
varnish
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varnished
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 the
violin
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 to make it neat and clean. The
last
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 stage is
vilion
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vision
pavilion
 is furnished fully with the
process
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 tools
requried
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required
 these are the eight
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process
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processes
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 to complete
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the vilion
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vilion
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vision
 by hand.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "next, ".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, violin, parts, front, part with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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