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The pie char below shows the number of native speakers of diiferent languages in Canada in 1996, 2006, and 2016.

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The chart depicts the number of native speakers of different
languages
 in
Canada
 in the
year
 1996,2006 and 2016 respectively.
Overall
,
People
 like to speak
English
,French and
non official
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languages
 in
Canada
.More
people
 in
Canada
 like to
talk
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speak
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English
 other than two
languages
. In detail, in the
year
 1996
people
 in
Canada
talk
Verb problem
spoke
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English
 in
majority
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the majority
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 compared to French
is
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23% and 17% non official
languages
. As
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the year
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year
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years
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go
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goes
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 in the
year
 2006
the
Correct article usage
apply
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people
prefer
Wrong verb form
preferred
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 to talk in
english
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English
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 but the percentage
became
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was
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little
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a little
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 less compared to the
year
 1996. French and
non official
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non-official
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 language has increased compared to the
year
 1996. The percentage of native speakers in
Canada
 in
the
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apply
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2016. The three
lanugages
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languages
 is
flucating
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fluctuating
. Society
speak
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speaks
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 57%
English
, 21% of French and 22% of
people
talk
Verb problem
speak
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 non-official language. The majority of
a
Correct article usage
apply
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people
talk
Verb problem
speak
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 three
languages
 but there is a difference
between
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apply
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in language in the
year
 2016. There
is
Wrong verb form
was
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 a slight
decerease
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decrease
 in
english
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English
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, french and non
offical
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official
languages
 in the
year
 2016.
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