the graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car bus or train between 1970 and 2000
The above line graphs
indicates
the average number of UK commuters Change the verb form
indicate
traveling
each day by Car, bus or Change the spelling
travelling
train
between 1970-2020. It is significant that in early
70's around 5.8 Correct article usage
the early
millions
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million
of
commuters Change preposition
apply
has
used Unnecessary verb
apply
car
as Correct pronoun usage
their car
the
main Change the word
their
traveling
method Change the spelling
travelling
while
train
commuters was
recorded Change the verb form
were
lower
below than 3 million. Change preposition
as lower
However
, till 1970-1980 utilization of buses was recored
at a constant number and it indicated a decrease over the years.
Looking at the information in more detail, the increase of usage in Correct your spelling
recorded
train
improved from approximately 2.8 million in 1970 and Fix the agreement mistake
trains
its
projected to increase Replace the word
it's
it is
upto
5 million in 2030. The decrease Correct your spelling
to
of
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in
Add an article
the bus
bus
might have Fix the agreement mistake
buses
occured
Correct your spelling
occurred
due to
increase
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the increase
of
cars and trains. Change preposition
in
Overall
when compared between 1970-2000
, Correct word choice
and 2000
use
of Correct article usage
the use
car
and Fix the agreement mistake
cars
train
has steeply increased.Fix the agreement mistake
trains
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