the graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car bus or train between 1970 and 2000

the graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car bus or train between 1970 and 2000
The above line graphs
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the average number of UK commuters
traveling
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each day by Car, bus or
train
between 1970-2020. It is significant that in
early
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70's around 5.8
millions
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of
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commuters
has
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used
car
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as
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main
traveling
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method
while
train
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was
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recorded
lower
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below than 3 million.
However
, till 1970-1980 utilization of buses was
recored
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recorded
at a constant number and it indicated a decrease over the years. Looking at the information in more detail, the increase of usage in
train
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improved from approximately 2.8 million in 1970 and
its
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projected to increase
upto
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to
5 million in 2030. The decrease
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the bus
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bus
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buses
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might have
occured
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occurred
due to
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the increase
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of
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cars and trains.
Overall
when compared between 1970-
2000
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and 2000
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,
use
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the use
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of
car
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cars
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and
train
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has steeply increased.
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