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the graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car bus or train between 1970 and 2000

the graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car bus or train between 1970 and 2000
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The above line graphs
indicates
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 the average number of UK commuters
traveling
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travelling
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 each day by Car, bus or
train
 between 1970-2020. It is significant that in
early
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 70's around 5.8
millions
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million
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of
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commuters
has
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used
car
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their car
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 as
the
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their
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 main
traveling
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travelling
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 method
while
train
 commuters
was
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 recorded
lower
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as lower
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 below than 3 million.
However
, till 1970-1980 utilization of buses was
recored
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recorded
 at a constant number and it indicated a decrease over the years. Looking at the information in more detail, the increase of usage in
train
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 improved from approximately 2.8 million in 1970 and
its
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 projected to increase
upto
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to
 5 million in 2030. The decrease
of
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in
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the bus
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bus
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buses
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 might have
occured
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occurred
due to
increase
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the increase
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of
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in
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 cars and trains.
Overall
 when compared between 1970-
2000
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and 2000
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,
use
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the use
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 of
car
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cars
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 and
train
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trains
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 has steeply increased.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words train with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "indicates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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