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This bar chart provides the information about International graduated students of Canadian universities by 2001 and 2006.

This bar chart provides the information about International graduated students of Canadian universities by 2001 and 2006.
This
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 bar chart provides
the
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information about International graduated
students
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 of Canadian
universities
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by
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 2001 and 2006. Looking at the chart, we can see the
universities
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Newfoundland
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in Newfoundland
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 and Labrador have absolutely identical
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percentages
 with Manitoba.
Students
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 of Nova Scotia
was
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graduated by more
pupil
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pupils
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 than Quebec and Alberta
university
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University
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by
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in
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2006
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the 2006
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 year.
Substantially
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A substantially
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less
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smaller
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persentage
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percentage
 of
students
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of
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in
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 Ontario
are
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have
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 graduated than all other
universities
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.
However
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, Ontario
grads
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 are shown by
partically
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particularly
partially
 as many
grads
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 as Manitoba and Labrador graduated
students
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. British Columbia has the most striking information. It shows far more
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 of
grads
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 in 2006 than
2001
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in 2001
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. But it has almost
similar
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a similar
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 indication with New Brunswick. By 2001, Alberta and British Columbia had shown
less
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fewer
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grads
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grades
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 than Nova Scotia and Quebec.
Moreover
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, New Brunswick
students
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 were more than Ontario. In general, we can observe
the
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that
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 International graduates
had
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have
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 provided big differences
of
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between
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 Canadian
universities
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 and British Columbia is the most striking
between
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among
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 other
universities
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, universities, grads with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provides" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • International graduates
  • Canadian universities
  • Degree levels
  • Bachelor's degree
  • Master's degree
  • Doctorate/PhD
  • Geographical distribution
  • Trends
  • Immigration policy
  • Tuition fees
  • Workforce
  • Fluctuations
  • Data comparison
  • Bar chart
  • Academic mobility
  • Partnership agreements
  • International education
  • Demographics
  • Economic impact
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