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The bar charts below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001.

The bar charts below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001.
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numbers
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 of
hours
 each teacher spent
during
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teaching in primary, lower secondary and upper secondary schools in
Japan
, Spain, Iceland and the
USA
 in 2001.
Overall
, every country’s
teacher
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teachers
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expreinced
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experienced
rise
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a rise
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 in
hours
that
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spent
in
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teaching
through
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 to school segments.
While
 educational
professional
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professionals
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 spent significantly more
time
 in
further
 schools in the
USA
,
Japan
’s teachers relatively spent similar
time
for
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 each part of
school
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. the
USA
 spent more
time
 in secondary class than any other
countries
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country
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 with nearly 1190
hours
. Iceland and Spain
following
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followed
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this
numbers
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number
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 with 900
hours
,
whereas
Japan
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 teachers spent the least amount
time
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of time
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 in that school part with nearly 700
hours
. Looking specifically at
lower
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the lower
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 secondary class, the
USA
 still protect
highest
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the highest
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 place in
regarding
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 to
hours
that
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spented
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spend
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during
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teaching (1000
hours
) and Spain
become
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a
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second place with almost 750
hours
.
Japan
 and Iceland
following
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followed
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 that numbers with 650 and 600
hours
 respectively. All countries spent less
time
 in primary schools and
Japan
 saw
lowest
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the lowest
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 with 600
hours
.
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