the diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.
The
process
diagram demonstrates methods, which are
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that
produced
instant noodles. Wrong verb form
produce
Overall
, it is noticeable that this
product passes eight process
in a factory. Commencing with storing flour in silos and culminating in Change to a plural noun
processes
labelling
of ready products.
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the labelling
To begin
with, the flour is delivered by lorry to the storage silos, where keeps all bulk products. The second step is preparation
of the Add an article
the preparation
a preparation
dough
with assistance
of Add an article
the assistance
mixer
. For that water, oil and flour are combined into a sizable bowl Correct article usage
a mixer
then
mixer
kneads Correct article usage
the mixer
dough
. The next stage is through rollers the Correct article usage
the dough
dough
rolls over repeatedly to form dough
sheets. After that, Change preposition
apply
from
long and strip sheets are made noodles discs through Change preposition
apply
dough
strips. At
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In
this
process
, the prepared discs are dried and cooked.
In the seventh process
, into many cups are added necessary vegetables and spices with noodles. Finally
, the process
concludes with labelling and sealing cups.Submitted by gulnurayau on
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