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The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graphs
provides
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provide
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 information concerning the
number
 of
bananas
Correct pronoun usage
that was
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was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 priced in Japan, France, Germany, and
USA
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the USA
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 between 1994 and 2004. The data can be divided into two groups, namely the
number
 that experienced an upward trend and a downward trend. Figures are given in the US dollars per kilogram.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that
bananas
Correct article usage
the bananas
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 rate in Japan was the greatest
number
,
whereas
the
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in the
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 USA was the lowest
number
 of the four.
To begin
 with Japan, in 1994, the
bananas's
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bananas
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 price was the largest
number
 starting approximately at 1.90 before a
dramatically
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dramatic
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 augmentation to about 2.90 in 1995 which is the highest
number
 of
bananas
 price over the given information. Moving on to
bananas
 value in France, Germany and the USA, they showed a similar trend to
remained
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remain
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 stable at lower than 2.00 and higher roughly than 0.80 over the period. It is
intersting
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interesting
 to note that there was one year that
bananas
 priced in France
was
Verb problem
had
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 the highest
number
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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in 2001
however
was
Verb problem
apply
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the lowest
number
is
Wrong verb form
was
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 in 2003.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, bananas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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