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The exploration and development of safe alternatives to fossil fuel should be the most important global priority today. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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 of
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fossil
fuels
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paramount task for
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 safety. I absolutely
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this
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 animals,
people
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those.
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controlled
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 and saved for future
generation
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. Dug fossil
fuels
 should be used in necessary conditions. Or else, it will
brings
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 some damages.
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, Many types of
fishes
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fish
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 may
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.
Such
 as the
American
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Americans
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 often
will dug
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 these fossil
fuels
 for their needs. But, It will cause the
losing
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 of animals,
that is
 fish.
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,
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Moreover
,
People
's health depends on nature or
nature
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 riches. If
people
 can not the sea products or fish, they affect
to
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their health.
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using
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fuels
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, For protecting the
enviroment
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environment
 and their things, it is important. I consider that
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 of air is one of the most
pity
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situation
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. As written
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above,
People
 must reduce of using these sources.
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, Fossil
fuels
 need to be used only
needful
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 circumstances. I will give my positive
idea
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 to these.
For living
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peaceful
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 and
safe
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 we ought to follow above the rules
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