The chart below shows what anthropology graduates from on university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five yeas.

The chart below shows what anthropology graduates from on university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five yeas.
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The pie chart gives information about the destination of anthropology
graduates
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from one university
as well as
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their salaries after five years of working.
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, more than half of the
graduates
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landed on
a full-time
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full-time work
a full-time job
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work
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, followed by part-time workers and those who are still unemployed after graduating. Meanwhile, most of the anthropology
graduates
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who
works
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work
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as freelance consultants and government employees have their salaries ranging from $75,000 to $100,000+.
Firstly
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, a lot of students who graduated with an anthropology degree acquired a full-time job, with an average of 52% of the total.
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was followed by those who have part-time
work
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and unemployed
graduates
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, with around 15% and 12%, respectively.
On the other hand
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, those who pursued their study with
part time
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part-time
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work
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have the lowest percentage of all, which only have 5% of the whole. After their five years of
work
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, most
of
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apply
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freelance consultants and those who are in
government
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the government
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sector are receiving wages that
ranges
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range
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from $75,000 to $100,000+, respectively. Employees of private companies' salaries are juggling around $50,000 to $100,000+, which was illustrated from 25% to 35% rate.
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, after five years working in three sectors who
receives
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wages from $25,000-$49,000 did not go over 10%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, work with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • anthropology graduates
  • undergraduate degree course
  • chart
  • table
  • findings
  • conclusions
  • salary data
  • comparisons
  • summarize
  • opinion
  • suggestions
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