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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Most societies believe that
parents
 must educate kids on how to be good humans in today's environment.
While
 others think that school is the best location to grasp
this
. In
this
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 I am going to examine
this
 phenomenon from both viewpoints in the paragraph below. To start with,
parents
 are obliged to teach
children
 since they are born. When people find a well-behaved youngster, at a glance, they think there must be great
parents
 who already educate them.
For instance
, Maudy Ayunda is one of the Indonesian
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 who inspire all the 20's teenagers. Through her achievement and well-mannered attitude, the societies can notice if both her mother and father have taught her not just knowledge, but
also
 how to act properly in the community.
However
,
children
 are required to gain and develop their knowledge, experience, and skills by attending schools. Teachers have a good understanding and have enormous experience in the education field which is not available at home.
For example
,
children
 can develop their critical thinking and analytics skills by having group discussions in
classroom
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. Through the podcast of the Ministry of Education, he said having a discussion in the team, can increase
children
's critical skills.
Therefore
, in the future, they can use it to create something big and provide benefits to society. In conclusion,
children
 who become good members of society must be taught by their
parents
 and teachers at school. Both
parents
 and schools are the basic foundation for
resultingresult
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resulting results
 in well-behaved youngsters.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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