The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.

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The line graph represents data from a 2008 report about

utilization

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the utilization

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of natural

resourcers

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resources

in America from 1980 with

prediction

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a prediction

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to 2030.

Overall

it is clear that

petrol and oil contributed the highest

units

, followed by coal and natural gas.

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, nuclear, solar/wind

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and hydropower come up with

lowest

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the lowest

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earnings. Turning to petrol and oil

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started with 35 quadrillion

units

and predicted will be rise gradually throughout half a century for well under 50.

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coal forecast will be

escalate

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tremendously and

also

had

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crossed with natural gas by nearly 2015 (just beneath a quarter).

Nonetheless

, nuclear and solar/wind

had

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intersected

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around 1985

then

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and then

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remain

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constant before will grow

slighly

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slightly

the

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2030. Even though fracked gas

appear

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a well

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well units

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units

, the situation is been

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and down and will oscillate by 2030. Hydropower;

however

kick

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off in almost 5

units

, pass over with nuclear and solar/wind, before

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relatively stable for the next

semicentury

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semi century

semi-century

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Vocabulary: Replace the words units with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
21Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

158 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Energy consumption
Renewable resources
Non-renewable resources
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Nuclear power
Hydroelectric power
Solar energy
Wind energy
Biomass
Consumption patterns
Technological advancements
Energy efficiency
Sustainable development
Carbon footprint
Energy policy
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Significant shifts
Economic factors
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