The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.
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The line graph represents data from a 2008 report about
utilization
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the utilization
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of natural
resourcers
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resources
in America from 1980 with
prediction
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a prediction
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to 2030.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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petrol and oil contributed the highest
units
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, followed by coal and natural gas.
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, nuclear, solar/wind
,
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and hydropower come up with
lowest
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the lowest
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earnings. Turning to petrol and oil
that
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it
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started with 35 quadrillion
units
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and predicted will be rise gradually throughout half a century for well under 50.
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Likewise
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coal forecast will be
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tremendously and
also
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had
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crossed with natural gas by nearly 2015 (just beneath a quarter).
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, nuclear and solar/wind
had
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intersected
at
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around 1985
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then
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and then
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remain
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remained
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constant before will grow
slighly
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slightly
by
the
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2030. Even though fracked gas
appear
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in
a well
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well units
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units
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, the situation is been
ups
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and down and will oscillate by 2030. Hydropower;
however
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kick
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kicks
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off in almost 5
units
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, pass over with nuclear and solar/wind, before
remain
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remaining
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relatively stable for the next
semicentury
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semi century
semi-century
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words units with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Renewable resources
  • Non-renewable resources
  • Fossil fuels
  • Nuclear power
  • Hydroelectric power
  • Solar energy
  • Wind energy
  • Biomass
  • Consumption patterns
  • Technological advancements
  • Energy efficiency
  • Sustainable development
  • Carbon footprint
  • Energy policy
  • Projections
  • Decade
  • Significant shifts
  • Economic factors
  • Environmental impact
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