The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.

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The line graph represents data from a 2008 report about

utilization

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the utilization

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of natural

resourcers

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resources

in America from 1980 with

prediction

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to 2030.

Overall

it is clear that

petrol and oil contributed the highest

units

, followed by coal and natural gas.

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, nuclear, solar/wind

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and hydropower come up with

lowest

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the lowest

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earnings. Turning to petrol and oil

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started with 35 quadrillion

units

and predicted will be rise gradually throughout half a century for well under 50.

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coal forecast will be

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tremendously and

also

had

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crossed with natural gas by nearly 2015 (just beneath a quarter).

Nonetheless

, nuclear and solar/wind

had

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intersected

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around 1985

then

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remain

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constant before will grow

slighly

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slightly

the

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2030. Even though fracked gas

appear

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a well

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well units

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units

, the situation is been

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and down and will oscillate by 2030. Hydropower;

however

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off in almost 5

units

, pass over with nuclear and solar/wind, before

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relatively stable for the next

semicentury

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semi century

semi-century

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Vocabulary: Replace the words units with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
21Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

158 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Energy consumption
Renewable resources
Non-renewable resources
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Nuclear power
Hydroelectric power
Solar energy
Wind energy
Biomass
Consumption patterns
Technological advancements
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Sustainable development
Carbon footprint
Energy policy
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Significant shifts
Economic factors
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The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.

In some countries, many people suffer from health problems due to eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. Do you agree or disagree?

Write a letter to a book store manager who is living in another city. Ask him/her to make available a book that you are interested in. In your letter, you should tell: – What book you are looking for? – Why you need this book? – How you plan to purchase the book?

Write about the following topic: Should private schools receive government funding? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents , for instance in sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sprts person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.