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The diagram shows the components of a neuron and how it works Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows the components of a neuron and how it works Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The described picture delineates the information related to the components that
neurons
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 contain and the working of
neurons
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. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that
neurons
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 are used for transporting messages with the help of two endings that are
dendrites
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 and terminal buttons.
Cell
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 bodies are made of two distinct parts. The circular structure
that is
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 present inside
of
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the
cell
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 body is known as soma, and
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cell
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the cell
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 body contains
number
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a number
the number
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 of extensions which are in
outward
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an outward
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direcion
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direction
, these are called
as
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dendrites
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.
Dendrites
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 help to receive signals from other cells. The message is
then
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 transferred to an
axon
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.
Axon
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 is a long
cyclindrical
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cylindrical
 structure
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that help
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help
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helps
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 to pass messages from
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cell
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the cell
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 body to
some
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other cells,
such
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 as
another
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other
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neurons
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, muscles, or glands.
While
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 transferring the message, an action potential is generated, which is an electrical signal travelling to
an
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the
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 end of an
axon
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.
However
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,
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axon
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the axon
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 is surrounded by
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a mylein
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mylein
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myelin
 sheath, and
help
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helps
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 with the speed of neural impulses.
At the end
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 of
neuron
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the neuron
a neuron
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, several
bulb like
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 structures are present that are known as terminal buttons. These buttons help in connecting
neuron
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neurons
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 with other cells and are connected with
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dendrites
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the dendrites
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 of
a
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apply
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different
neuron
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neurons
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words neurons, dendrites, cell, axon with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • neuron
  • nervous system
  • dendrites
  • soma
  • cell body
  • nucleus
  • axon
  • electrical impulses
  • myelin sheath
  • axon terminals
  • neurotransmitters
  • synapse
  • signal transmission
  • insulating
  • unmyelinated fibers
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