The diagram shows and illustrate about the cement production and how cement is used to produce concrete for construction of new buildings.

The diagram shows and illustrate about the cement production and how cement is used to produce concrete for construction of new buildings.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram shows and illustrate about the cement production and how cement is used to produce concrete for construction of new buildings.
The given graphs illustrate the process by which cement and concrete are made for building purposes.
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, the raw materials go through four essential stages before being sealed for
furter
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further
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. As
state
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above, the very first of the four
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is to crush both limestone and clay into powder.
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, the aforementioned substances
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then
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run through a mixer
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apparatus
.
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, following that, the mixed dust is heated in a rotating cylinder using
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source of open flame.
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, in the fourth and
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stage of the process, the heated goods are
grinded
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into fine grains before being bagged for distribution. Following that, to make concrete, the previous ingredient is added in a concrete mixture with water, sand and gravel in 15, 10, 25 and 50% portions
repectively
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respectively
. The end result is an adhesive concoction fit for construction uses.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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