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The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides information about
British
 emigration to the selected destination from 2004 to 2007.
Overall
,
British
 emigration showed the highest data in
Australia
at the end
 of the
period
.
British
 people migrated to
Australia
, Spain, New Zealand, the USA, and France between 2004 and 2007. At the beginning of the
period
, just over 40
thousand
British
 moved to
Australia
. Approximately 23
thousand
 people migrated to New Zealand in 2004. France showed the same
number
 in 2004. New Zeeland illustrated similar data throughout the
period
. Just under 20
thousand
migrants
 moved to France in 2007, and it showed the lowest
number
at the end
 of the
period
. Most
migrants
 migrated to
Australia
 in 2006, and it was just over 50
thousand
. In 2005, the
number
 of
migrants
 was just nearly 40
thousand
 in
Australia
, and it was the highest
number
this
 year. The USA showed the lowest
number
 of
migrants
 in 2005; it was just under 20
thousand
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words british, australia, period, thousand, number, migrants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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