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The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides information about
British
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 emigration to the selected destination from 2004 to 2007.
Overall
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,
British
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 emigration showed the highest data in
Australia
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at the end
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 of the
period
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.
British
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 people migrated to
Australia
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, Spain, New Zealand, the USA, and France between 2004 and 2007. At the beginning of the
period
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, just over 40
thousand
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British
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 moved to
Australia
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. Approximately 23
thousand
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 people migrated to New Zealand in 2004. France showed the same
number
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 in 2004. New Zeeland illustrated similar data throughout the
period
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. Just under 20
thousand
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migrants
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 moved to France in 2007, and it showed the lowest
number
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at the end
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 of the
period
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. Most
migrants
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 migrated to
Australia
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 in 2006, and it was just over 50
thousand
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. In 2005, the
number
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 of
migrants
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 was just nearly 40
thousand
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 in
Australia
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, and it was the highest
number
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this
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 year. The USA showed the lowest
number
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 of
migrants
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 in 2005; it was just under 20
thousand
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words british, australia, period, thousand, number, migrants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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