The shown Line graph below illustrates the condition of participation by club members to different courses.

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The

graph

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presents the situation of

participation

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in three different

activities

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by the members of the club between 1995-2015.

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gym

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activities

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and team

sports

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show almost

similar

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a similar

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trend

whereas

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swimming has

constantly

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a constantly

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declining

graph

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. The most progressive nature of the

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was in

gym

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activities

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. A similar feature in the nature of graphs was observed in the

teams

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team's

teams'

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sports

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and

gym

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activities

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teams

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team

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sports

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represented a fluctuating nature, with an increase in involvement from 1995 to 2010 but a slight drop in 2015. In the end, the

teams

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team's

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sports

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hold the 1st position with the highest

participation

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of almost 33% of members.The

gym

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activities

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were able to increase there number to

participation

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constantly from approximately 5% to 25% In the beginning (1995), swimming was the task

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most people were involved almost around 50%. It shows a sharp decline till 2010, with only 15% of the club members participating. The

graph

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was maintained steady from 2010 to 2015. The ratio of

participation

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from 1995 to 2015 was greater than 1:3, reaching the

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position among the three

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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, participation, activities, gym, sports with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 5 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

180 words

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increase
end of the period
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The shown Line graph below illustrates the condition of participation by club members to different courses.

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