The shown Line graph below illustrates the condition of participation by club members to different courses.

The shown Line graph below illustrates the condition of participation by club members to different courses.
The
graph
presents the situation of
participation
in three different
activities
by the members of the club between 1995-2015.
Overall
,
gym
activities
and team
sports
show almost
similar
Correct article usage
a similar
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trend
whereas
swimming has
constantly
Correct article usage
a constantly
show examples
declining
graph
. The most progressive nature of the
graph
was in
gym
activities
. A similar feature in the nature of graphs was observed in the
teams
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team's
teams'
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sports
and
gym
activities
.
However
,
teams
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team
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sports
represented a fluctuating nature, with an increase in involvement from 1995 to 2010 but a slight drop in 2015. In the end, the
teams
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team's
teams'
show examples
sports
hold the 1st position with the highest
participation
of almost 33% of members.The
gym
activities
were able to increase there number to
participation
constantly from approximately 5% to 25% In the beginning (1995), swimming was the task
which
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in which
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most people were involved almost around 50%. It shows a sharp decline till 2010, with only 15% of the club members participating. The
graph
was maintained steady from 2010 to 2015. The ratio of
participation
from 1995 to 2015 was greater than 1:3, reaching the
last
position among the three
activities
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, participation, activities, gym, sports with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • illustrates
  • condition
  • participation
  • club members
  • courses
  • line graph
  • levels
  • fluctuated
  • overall
  • number of participants
  • observed
  • dance course
  • initial
  • increase
  • end of the period
  • lowest
  • art course
  • declining
  • gradually
  • music course
  • witnessed
  • relatively stable
  • hovering
  • conclusion
  • demonstrates
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