The shown Line graph below illustrates the condition of participation by club members to different courses.

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The

graph

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presents the situation of

participation

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in three different

activities

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by the members of the club between 1995-2015.

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gym

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activities

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and team

sports

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show almost

similar

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a similar

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trend

whereas

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swimming has

constantly

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a constantly

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declining

graph

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. The most progressive nature of the

graph

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was in

gym

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activities

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. A similar feature in the nature of graphs was observed in the

teams

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team's

teams'

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sports

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and

gym

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activities

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However

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teams

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team

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sports

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represented a fluctuating nature, with an increase in involvement from 1995 to 2010 but a slight drop in 2015. In the end, the

teams

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team's

teams'

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sports

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hold the 1st position with the highest

participation

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of almost 33% of members.The

gym

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activities

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were able to increase there number to

participation

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constantly from approximately 5% to 25% In the beginning (1995), swimming was the task

which

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in which

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most people were involved almost around 50%. It shows a sharp decline till 2010, with only 15% of the club members participating. The

graph

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was maintained steady from 2010 to 2015. The ratio of

participation

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from 1995 to 2015 was greater than 1:3, reaching the

last

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position among the three

activities

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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, participation, activities, gym, sports with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 5 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
5
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

180 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

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condition
participation
club members
courses
line graph
levels
fluctuated
overall
number of participants
observed
dance course
initial
increase
end of the period
lowest
art course
declining
gradually
music course
witnessed
relatively stable
hovering
conclusion
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