“Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (For example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?”

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consumption of three various fast food namely
Hamburger
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Hamburgers
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, Fish and chips and Pizza
during
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1970 to 1990. To give an overview, it was noticeable that Fish and chips were most favourable in
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whereas
Hamburger and Pizza analysed
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trend throughout
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. To commence with, it was observed that Hamburger consumption
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300 in 1970 and it slightly dwindled in
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period
. Even though, in
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of the
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, it dropped and reached around 210.
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, throughout the
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it analysed levelled off. Moving forward with Fish and
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,
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under
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100 in 1970 and after
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it continuously
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in 1975
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100.
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slightly increased
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under the 100 and continuously
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till 1985.
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, it climbed suddenly and reached nearly 290 in 1990.
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