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Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information. State which you consider to be the most effective. •comics •books •radio •television •film •theatre

#three #media #information #•comics #•books #•radio #•television #•film #•theatre
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things
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people
 do
affect
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on
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their
mind
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minds
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. When we watch, read or listen
impact
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on
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our thinking.
For example
,
books
, television and theatre. All of
they
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them
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 may chosen by different
individals
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individuals
. So everyone has to
be
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select what he or she
show
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.
Firtly
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Firstly
, there is a place called
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 where
people
 can watch
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the show
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show
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shows
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, meet each other, and eat some traditional food. In
free
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my free
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 time
could
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can
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 see
intersting
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interesting
 things. After watching they can
disscuse
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discuss
 the level of
show
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the show
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 or
talking
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 about personal issues that increase their
relationshipe
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relationship
relationships
.
Contraversy
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Controversy
 actors who apply an imagination
on
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to
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 that building. Some of them
has
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have
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 bad content that
reverse
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 the result of enjoying.
In
addition
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addition,
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 we would explain how much
books
useful
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are useful
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 for human communication. they reflect the
idea
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ideas
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 of writers.
this
mean
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 anybody
read
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reads
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 any book
he
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apply
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or
she
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get
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gets
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 of
writer
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writer's
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 opinion. Science, history, geography, math and
litreture
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literature
 are
record
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recorded
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on
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in
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books
. During these can transfer
a cultures
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cultures
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 between
citizen
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citizens
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 with no contact , they are the most effective media.
Lastly
, radio
had
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 used since 1970. It is the oldest device that
comunicate
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communicates
people
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with people
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 from east to
weast
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west
 region and from north to south.
This
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had
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has
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strong
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a strong
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 affected on human. It had
transfedred
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transferred
 news,
listen
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listened
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 to music or
interview
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interviewed
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for
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apply
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actors. Because
this
 tool is
diapeare
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disappear
diaper
 we can not consider that has number one on
another materials
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another material
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.
Finally
,
everythings
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everything
 may have two sides, positive and negative and their influence on
people
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people's
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 opinion depend on components. Whatever I think no one can refuse how much the advantages of
books
 are.
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