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Some people say that spending the national budget on space exploration wastes resources. They insist that that fund should be spent on people living on earth. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people argue that the government should allocate money to the resources useful for individuals living on Earth rather than investing in the budget for
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exploration
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. I disagree with the statement because the
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 of
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 is paramount for the growth of the
country
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 to maintain its reputation in the world. In
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. To commence with, in the race for modernisation countries are finding ways to explore other planets and it is a big achievement for them if they can do so.
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, a nation which is not making efforts and investing to explore other planets will lag and could
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 its importance and reputation in the world.
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, recently India has achieved a big achievement by reaching the moon and putting the flag of the
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 there which is an honour for all the people of the
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. Another worth considering factor investing in
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exploration
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 is to promote scientific research and discovery because natural resources are on the verge of depletion sooner or later.
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, exploring other planets can help find alternatives to these resources and can make living easy for mankind.
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 the benefits of
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 extend beyond the earth.
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,
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 some individuals, more budget should be spent on improving the social, educational and economic development of the nation because it will lead to the improvement in lifestyle and minimise the unemployment rate.
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, I believe the investment of money in
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exploration
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 growth of the
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 for promoting scientific research and for finding new ways to improve lifestyle.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • resources
  • budget
  • space exploration
  • wastes
  • people living on Earth
  • disagree
  • technological advancements
  • scientific research
  • discovery
  • inspires
  • motivates
  • future generations
  • benefits
  • extend
  • long-term investment
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