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You recently bought a digital camera. You discovered that it was damagend and some components were missing.

#camera #damagend #components
Dear Sir or Madam I hope
this
 letter finds you in radiant health and the best of spirits. I am writing
this
 letter with the crucial purpose of complaining about, for the past 14 days, I have been purchasing and using digital camera products.
However
, I am a photographer.
For
this
 reason, I want most important
this
 device.
Additionally
, I'm interested in photographing nature. So I'm really enjoying it .
Furthermore
, I want to buy
this
 photograph,
this
 device worked for 10 days and 2 days of letter
not
Add a missing verb
did not
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 work. On the one side the first and most important thing, which should be mentioned is that the first problem
this
 thing photo had is very bad and colourless. I hope
this
 thing you give positive feedback and to be honest, You will exchange or repair
this
 device.
Finally
, having given the previous facts, I hope you will take immediate action in order to solve the issue
as well as
 look forward to hearing from you in the near future.
Thus
, do not hesitate to contact me. Yours faithfully, Sarvinoz
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