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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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With the development of technology, there are different kinds of applications which
people
 can
use
 to find and read favourite books
besides
 copy. Some individuals claim that several years later all printed papers will be eliminated and ebooks replace them. I completely agree with
this
 perspective for some reasons.
First,
using mobile phones or other digital devices in order to read books or news can help the environment and nature.
Also
, it can save animals' habitats and maintain clean weather.
For example
, humans do not need to cut trees in order to make paper which hurts nature and species by destroying jungles.
In addition
,
people
 can save money by using online applications to read their favourite novels.
This
 way can encourage younger pupils to
use
 the technology and improve their knowledge.
For instance
, individuals can download ebooks and save them on their phone or laptop in order to read them when they have enough time without paying money
also
, teenagers learn how to
use
 applications and the internet to have their own ebooks.
Finally
,
people
 do not need to carry lots of books anywhere can be difficult , especially for individuals who love reading anytime.
On the other hand
, if
people
use
 electronic apps to read their favourite subjects it can have a bad effect on their health.
Also
, they are addicted to technology and it changes their manner.
For example
, the mobile phone has negative radiations that can impact humans' minds and cause
mind
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 difficulties.
Moreover
, it can hurt their eyes if they look at the screen for a long time. In conclusion, it is true that using electronic book have some negative impacts but there are a lot of benefits for humans that indicate replacing e-book with printed paper is a good modification for global.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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