The chart below shows the percentage of five kinds of book sold by a bookseller between 1972 and 2012.

The chart below shows the percentage of five kinds of book sold by a bookseller between 1972 and 2012.
The pie chart sketches out how many types of books were sold by bookshops in a period of 40 years. At the outset, adult fiction was the most dominant book which was sold out in all years.
However
,
biography
came as the least one which people bought. From 1972 to 2012, Adult fiction outperformed the other demographics with a higher sales ratio. 20% in 1972 and
then
the sales ratio increased to 25% in 1992. From there, it took a high jump in 2012 which was at 45 %.
Moreover
, Children’s fiction had a consistent approach throughout the years. It started at 20% and stopped at 25%.
In contrast
, Travel and
biography
formed almost similar percentages throughout. In the beginning, both were at the highest level which was around 15% travel and 20%
biography
. But, they ended in 2012 with lower percentages like 10% travel and 8%
biography
. In the end, others began with a significant hike with a dominant sold ratio in 1972 but they finished with almost half the percentage in 2012.
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