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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.

#people #professionals #doctors #engineers #work #country
On the one hand, some
people
 believe that professionals,
such
 as doctors and engineers, should
be stay
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 to
work
 in the
country
 where they did their training, but on the other
hands
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hand
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, others say they should
work
 anywhere they want to be. I think working in the
country
 where they graduated isn'
t
obligation
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an obligation
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,
therefore
 they can
work
 wherever they
went
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want
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 to be. First of all, some
people
 think professionals are essential for every
country
. To get licenses, they have to pay a lot of money to learn,
therefore
goverments
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governments
government
 or universities provide them
financial
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supports
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. Some
people
 believe that they have to give something back to the
country
 they studied
because
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 they owe money
from
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to
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 the
country
. Second of all, others consider everyone has a right to go anywhere,
therefore
 they don'
t
 need to feel pressure even if someone tries to force them to stay in the
country
 they studied. Personally, I feel working in a
contry
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country
 they want to
work
is
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great
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Idea
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 for them. Especially, in Japan even if professionals, they can'
t
 get enough salary to live.
For instance
,
currently
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 my friends who are nurses
work
 in Australia since they can earn a lot of money with
less
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fewer
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 working hours.
To sum up
,
people
 have different perspectives
of
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on
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 jobs. I think no matter where
proffesonals
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professionals
works
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work
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, it doesn'
t
 bother anyone.
Therefore
 they should
work
 wherever they would like to
work
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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