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Plastic bags, plastic bottles, and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environment and people? What can be done by governments and individuals to solve this problem?

#plastic #bags #bottles #environment #damage #people #governments #individuals
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Since
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plastic
 was invented,
people
 have enjoyed using
plastic
 in their daily lives for the reason of
convinience
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convenience
. It is undeniable that using
plastic
 gives us
more
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a more
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 comfortable lifestyle but it
also
visious
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has visible
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 side effects on
human's
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human
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 health
as well as
 the environment.
To begin
 with, I assume that most
people
 on
planet
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the planet
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 will agree
wiht
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with
 the fact that the earth and the oceans are being destroyed because of overusing
plastic
. The majority
ot
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of
plastic
 doesn't pass the recycling system, being dumped under the ground or in the sea.
This
 is damaging the ecosystem which is vital for
human
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humans
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 and animals to
linger
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live
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 their own lives.
Also
, it can have negative influences on
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the human's
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human's
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human
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 body by micro-
plastic
, which is well-known for causing cancers.
Thus
, it is inevitable not only
set
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to set
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 some regulating usage of
plastic
 but change
people
's
recogsition
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recognition
.
To begin
 with, making laws which prevent
people
 from
exploting
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exploiting
exploring
plastic
 will help decrease the whole amount of
plastic
. If the law is
applyed
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applied
,
people
 will stop using too much
plastic
 since there is
possibility
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the possibility
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 that they can pay
fine
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a fine
the fine
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, or in more serious
case
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cases
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, go to jail.
Second,
it is
also
crusial
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crucial
 that
people
 consider using
plastic
 can violate their land, sea and even their health. It will have
people
 go away from the usage
plastic
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of plastic
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 in their lives,
as
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and as
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 a result, it will not be seen
plastic
slowly
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slow
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, In conclusion,
plastic
 has
serious
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a serious
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 impact on the environment and
human's
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human
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 health. To solve
this
 problem, adequate regulation is
nessesary
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necessary
 and
people
 must be aware of
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the
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danger of using
plastic
.
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