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Band 4

Plastic bags, plastic bottles, and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environment and people? What can be done by governments and individuals to solve this problem?

#plastic #bags #bottles #environment #damage #people #governments #individuals
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plastic
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 was invented,
people
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 have enjoyed using
plastic
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 in their daily lives for the reason of
convinience
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convenience
. It is undeniable that using
plastic
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 gives us
more
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a more
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 comfortable lifestyle but it
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visious
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has visible
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 side effects on
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human
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 health
as well as
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 the environment.
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 with, I assume that most
people
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 on
planet
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the planet
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 will agree
wiht
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with
 the fact that the earth and the oceans are being destroyed because of overusing
plastic
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. The majority
ot
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of
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 doesn't pass the recycling system, being dumped under the ground or in the sea.
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 is damaging the ecosystem which is vital for
human
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humans
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 and animals to
linger
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live
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 their own lives.
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, it can have negative influences on
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the human's
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human's
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 body by micro-
plastic
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, which is well-known for causing cancers.
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, it is inevitable not only
set
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 some regulating usage of
plastic
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 but change
people
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's
recogsition
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recognition
.
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 with, making laws which prevent
people
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 from
exploting
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exploiting
exploring
plastic
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 will help decrease the whole amount of
plastic
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. If the law is
applyed
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applied
,
people
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 will stop using too much
plastic
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 since there is
possibility
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the possibility
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 that they can pay
fine
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a fine
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, or in more serious
case
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cases
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, go to jail.
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it is
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crusial
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crucial
 that
people
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 consider using
plastic
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 can violate their land, sea and even their health. It will have
people
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 go away from the usage
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plastic
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of plastic
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 in their lives,
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and as
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 a result, it will not be seen
plastic
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slowly
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, In conclusion,
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 has
serious
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a serious
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 impact on the environment and
human's
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human
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 health. To solve
this
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 problem, adequate regulation is
nessesary
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necessary
 and
people
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 must be aware of
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the
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danger of using
plastic
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.
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