The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie diagram illustrates the distribution of various factors that are mainly responsible for making people more happy in numerous age gaps.

Overall

, success at the workplace and performing their favourite jobs are most prominent

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economic issues, journeys, and many more factors

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to become happy.

Firstly

, the proportion of prospects in job sectors is 31% when society

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under 30

however

, the part is 32% when they become over 30. The case of fulfilling hobbies at the same age shows a similar trend

whereas

the percentage increases by 2% from low to high age.

On the other hand

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who are under 30 prefer to travel more around the world,

in contrast

, whenever they reach the 30, they try to spend more moments with their family and the proportion is 15% and 14% respectively.

In addition

, economic issues are highly significant in making a person happy and the results shown in the chart where that folk over 30 consider more financial security. At the same time, there are other issues which help a person to be happy but these values decreased over time, from 14% to 10%.

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