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some people think that it is a good idea to socialise with work colleagues during evenings and weekends . other people think it is important to keep working life completely separate from social life . discuss both these views and give youe own opinion .

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 a group of
people
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 enjoy spending
time
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 with their coworkers after
work
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 or on holidays, others emphasize that it is essential for a person to divide his or her professional and personal aspects. The former group
think
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 that since we spent the majority of our working days with our colleagues, they
are
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 among the closest
people
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 to us, and the latter group put stress on conflict prevention. Spending more than 40 hours a week with
people
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who
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 you do not resonate with is simply not pleasurable. Many workers develop personal
bond
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bonds
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 with their colleagues. They become friends
and
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share their thoughts and sometimes spend
time
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 together.
This
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 helps them with having a better
time
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 in the
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work space
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workspace
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. In
this
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 regard, the advocates of
such
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notion
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 argue that a personal relationship with coworkers can contribute to a better and healthier
work
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 environment.
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 the contribution is true,
this
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 should not be misunderstood
with
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in
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 a romantic relationship. Personally, I try to be amicable in my job.
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, sharing interests or having a coffee from
time
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 to
time
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have
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 contributed
in
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a
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better mental health in my life.
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, there is a more strict view that agrees with the separation of
work
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 and social life. They say that friendships in
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the work
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work space
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workspace
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 have
detrimental
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a detrimental
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 effect on the efficiency of workers in various aspects. Every friendship may turn into a partnership, which is totally unacceptable in many circumstances. Or even worse, friends may turn into enemies. Companies do not like to take the risk of two adversary
people
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being
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working on the same thing together.
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 immensely deteriorates their professional outcome.
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, I simply understand why many successful
people
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 detest the notion of friendship in
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work place
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the workplace
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. In conclusion, it is important to know that whether you shape a friendship with coworkers, frankly because it feels much better in life, or avoid social interaction with colleagues, in order to avoid future conflicts, it is essential to keep your moral and personal boundaries.

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