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The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in Netherland between 2001 and 2006. Describe the information in the table and make comparisons where appropriate. Write at least 150 words.

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in Netherland between 2001 and 2006. Describe the information in the table and make comparisons where appropriate. Write at least 150 words.
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The table shows changes in the average
miles
 travelled
on
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by
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 different transportation methods in
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 from 2001 to 2006.
Overall
, it is evident that the most popular mode of travel in both years was a car.
Furthermore
, all the distances grew throughout the years, except for walking, riding a bicycle and a local bus. The total distance
traveled
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travelled
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 by all modes significantly increased from 4740 in 2001 to 6475 in 2006,
however
, despite
this
, three modes decreased in
number
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a number
the number
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 of
miles
 travelled. These were, walking, which slightly dropped by 48
miles
, bicycle, which decreased by 10% and local bus, which dropped by 50% from 429 to 274, respectively. In terms of other means of
traveling
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travelling
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,
car
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the car
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 indicated the most popularity among others in both years,
in addition
, it significantly grew in terms of
miles
 travelled reaching almost 5000.
Similarly
, local distance
bus
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buses
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 more than doubled in
miles
 and
taxi
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taxis
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 tripled from 13 to 42, respectively.
In addition
,
distance
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the distance
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 travelled by train increased in the period given by 126
miles
. All other modes increased as well, indicating 585
miles
 in 2006, which is 135
miles
 more than it used to be in 2001.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words miles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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