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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first tie this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. explain why you think your friend would enjoy a campling holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

#friend #holiday #first #tie #summer #advice
Dear friend Safia, I hope
this
 letter finds you in
a
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apply
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good health and situation.I am writing to you to
advice
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advise
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you for
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for going
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to go
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a
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on a
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holiday camping at Arkweat Mountain series with your family ,and
gets
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have
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unforgettable
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an unforgettable
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experiance
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experience
. As I mentioned above ,The Arkawet
Maountain
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Mountain
locates
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located
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on
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in
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 North Sudan ,Where you
noticed
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notice
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 a series of mountains and nature ,and you will
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be enjoued
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enjoued
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enjoy
enjoyed
 with sunset and sunrise views and
cloud
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the cloud
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parthly
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partly
 disappears
the
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from the
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 mountains which
gives
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give
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an afasinating
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afasinating
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a fascinating
fascinating
 picture.
Moreover
 ,There
also
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are also
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aspecies
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a species
species
 of monkeys above the mountains and between the trees ,you
entertaintment
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entertainment
 with them and you can feed them
also
 ,But be careful ,
its
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it's
it is
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 so tricky.
Altoughs
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Although
,I would like to attention you there
is
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are
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 no
toliets
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toilets
toilet
,So be careful and
also
 the weather
on
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in
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 morning and night becomes
coold
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cold
,you must bring a blanket and hot
drincks
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drinks
 like
coffe
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coffee
 and tea ,and
don,t
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don't
 forget the hot
choclate
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chocolate
,I know you are in love with it . I
hopefuly
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hope
 these
higlight
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highlights
mention
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mentioned
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 above ,
helps
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will help
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 you to
spent
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spend
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 a fabulas
hoilday
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holiday
 camping ,and I want
to
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you to
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 contact
with
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apply
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me after return to
sechedual
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the sechedual
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for
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to
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caming
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come
togeather
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together
next summer . Beast Regards
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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