A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first tie this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. explain why you think your friend would enjoy a campling holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

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holiday camping at Arkweat Mountain series with your family ,and

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next summer . Beast Regards

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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