In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasize that their products are new in some way. Why is this ? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

These days many
companies
and businesses assert that they produce new and special
things
during their advertisement. They do
this
to rival
with
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other
companies
for bestselling.
Also
in my
view
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their action could have both positive and negative
development
. In
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the modern
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modern
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era there is a wide range of stuff for people to choose
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and
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buy. So businesses try to emphasize that they have a new and distinguished product to
can
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compete with other
companies
.
In
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they absorb
people
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attention to have bestselling and good profit of their
products
.
For instance
, there are many cosmetic brands around the world which regularly present and produce new kinds of
products
in relation to skin or hair care and they have high income
of
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it. As far as
development
is
considered
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, Making and producing new
things
have some prose and cones. In terms of positive
development
,
companies
try to manufacture new
things
with high quality and reasonable
price
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to compete with others. it is profitable for customers too and they can access
to
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various
high quality
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goods.
While
in the past they used to buy limited types of
products
.
On the other hand
, in some cases, just producing new items without any right thought behind it or
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not
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appropriate time to research and evaluate them , I think is considered as a negative
development
. Because it leads to
produce
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low quality
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things
.
For example
, there are some health
products
which
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primary ones
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that cause
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many health problems and allergies for people. Because the company do not consider and examine the whole side effects in
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time. In conclusion, many brands emphasize
on
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manufacturing new goods to achieve better
selling
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and income. I think
this
action in some cases
have
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positive
development
while
in other cases might lead to negative
development
.
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  • Innovation
  • Fast-paced
  • Distinguishing
  • Psychological aspect
  • Inherently
  • Perceived
  • Continuous improvement
  • Revolutionary
  • Feasible
  • Throwaway culture
  • Undervalue
  • Longevity
  • Obscure
  • Novelty
  • Unsatisfactory
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