the maps below show a coal mine and its redevelopment into a visitors attraction site.

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The map displays the redevelopment plan for a coal

mine

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to turn it into a tourist attraction.

Overall

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, the parking lot in the southwest corner will be the only point of interest that

would

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stay the same

while

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the rest of the area will

be reconstruct

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into a tourist spot. To be more specific, focusing on the left side of the coal

mine

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, on the site of the current office and staff's changing room in the northwest corner, there is a plan for the construction of a museum.

Meanwhile

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the medical room in the centre would soon

be replace

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by a coffee shop, with a footpath

below

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apply

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leading to it. The

foot path

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footpath

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would be situated where the lorry park currently is.

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Additionally

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the coal

mine

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in the upper middle of the area will

be adjust

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for visitors' use. On the right side of the coal

mine

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, currently, stands two waste pits. In the future, it is the goal to turn the northeast waste pit into a truck driving track.

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, the southeast waste pit is going to

be turn

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into a picnic area with a children's playground. The children's playground would occupy the southeast corner

while

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the picnic areas

lies

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lie

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directly east, above the playground

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words mine with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

209 words

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the maps below show a coal mine and its redevelopment into a visitors attraction site.

Some people think that all the lawbreakers should be taken into the prison, while others believe that there are better alternatives. (for example, doing some work or learning some skills in the community). Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today ‘s world subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us buy things. Other people think that is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

For some people, shopping is not just about buying what is necessary, but is a form of entertainment. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the environment as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.