At present, the media affects people's lives significantly. What impact does this have on society? Is it a negative or positive development?

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Currently, it is believed that

people

lives

have significantly been affected by the

media

and I think

this

has a negative influence on our society which will be discussed in the subsequent paragraphs.

To begin

with, the

media

in its different forms be it printed like magazines or electronic have in recent times had a major impact on the

lives

of individuals. The

media

has a lot of content which many

people

try to emulate especially the youth. They go on these social sites and see the luxurious lifestyles of famous

people

which some see as role models and they try to copy their ways of life which might be different from their actual

lives

when they are off social circles.

This

trend is adversely affecting our society because followers of these celebrities copy blindly just to become like them.

Also

, in the quest to be like their idols, many of the youth engage in diverse activities to get money some through robbery, prostitution unnecessary competition etc.

For example

, a survey conducted on the University of Ghana campus

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revealed that most of the participants said they have to look exactly like these popular persons they look up to and by so doing engage themselves in

this

kind of act.

Furthermore

this

pattern of the effect of the

media

on our

lives

is a waste of time to a large extent than the good we derive from it

such

as making communications and working easier. Most

people

can be on their smartphones, tablets, laptops or even watching TV all day long which I believe is a waste of time leading to unproductivity. Many

people

spend their resourceful and productive time watching unimportant videos streaming forgetting their roles at work thereby reducing yield in their fields of work.

Moreover

this

leads to some health conditions

such

as eye-straining, auditory problems etc.

To conclude

, it is said that

people

's way of life has grossly been influenced nowadays by the use of the

media

which I concur has more demerits to our community.

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Provide a clear thesis statement in the introduction to outline your position on whether the impact of media on society is negative or positive.

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Expand your vocabulary and use more varied sentence structures.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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At present, the media affects people's lives significantly. What impact does this have on society? Is it a negative or positive development?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Young people often copy the behaviour of famous people, so celebrities should only be allowed to advertise healthy food or drink and should not encourage unhealthy habits such as smoking. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people sau that in order to be happy you must have a job you love doing other say that other factors are more important do you think that people can only be happy if they have a job they really enjoy

The best way to reduce traffic congestion in cities is to provide a free public transport service. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion with examples.

Some people think the increasing business and cultural contact between countries brings many positive effects. Others say it causes the loss of national identities. Argue for your point of view on this topic

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?