The table below shows the monthly expenditure of an average Australian family in 1991 and 2001.

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The table shows different categories of monthly spending for an

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family in 1991 and 2001. The different categories include food, electricity and water, clothing, housing, transport and other goods/services.

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, the total spending has increased over the span of 10 years from 1991 to 2001. For both years, money is mostly spent on other goods and services. Meanwhile spending on clothing contributed the least to total expenditure for both years. Focusing on the year 1991

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the highest money spent is on other goods, sitting at 250

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Dollars

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a month.

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then

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followed by food at 155

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Dollars

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. Housing, electricity water and transport

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come

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each at 95, 75 and 70

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dollars

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respectively. Clothing takes the

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place at 30

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. Moving on to the year 2001, there has been an increase of 40

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in total spending, from 675 to 715

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in the ten-year gap. Spending on other items continued to take the top spot, experiencing an increase of 20

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, bringing it up to 270

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is followed by food electricity and water which have both drastically grown to 160 and 120

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respectively. Expenditure on housing

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experienced a small increase of 5

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, to 100

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, though, expenditure on transport has dipped significantly, dropping from 70 to 45

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trend can

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be seen with clothing with a decrease down to 20

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Dollars

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a month.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 9.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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The table below shows the monthly expenditure of an average Australian family in 1991 and 2001.

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