The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. the second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which was result from this energy use.
The pie charts
represents
how Change the verb form
represent
energy
is used and the greenhouse gas emissions which result from the energy
use in an average Australian family, measured in per cent.
Overall
, it is clear that
majority
of people in Correct article usage
the majority
this
country utilize energy
for heating and
followed by water heating Correct word choice
apply
whereas
they are
rarely use it for cooling. Unnecessary verb
apply
Although
that product to make
Change the verb form
makes
body
Correct article usage
the body
felt
warm Wrong verb form
feel
did
not produce a lot of carbon emissions like Wrong verb form
it does
what
water heating did.
Correct pronoun usage
apply
Thing
for Add an article
The thing
A thing
reduce
heat used by 2% and Wrong verb form
reducing
create
more Wrong verb form
creating
a
per cent Correct article usage
apply
pollutions
, yet for regelation’s emission Fix the agreement mistake
pollution
accountanted
twofold Correct your spelling
accountant
accountants
accounted
similarly
with lighting that manufactured more contamination in gas. Moreover
, other
instruments nearly a sixth experienced climb roughly two times.
Change preposition
for other
However
, Australian menage
make use of Correct your spelling
men
energy
in heating
area (42%), but accomplished declines enormously when it comes to Correct article usage
the heating
pollute
(15%). From what we can see, four out of five Replace the word
pollution
Australian’s
Change noun form
Australians
adepted
rises.Correct your spelling
adapted
adopted
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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