The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The provided two graphs illustrate the information for a survey of what people in different kinds of age groups make them the most popular and happy.

Overall

, most of the different kinds of age groups prefer the achievement of work rather than being with their family or assigning their hobbies. Looking at the details, it can be seen that the highest percentage of 31 per

cent

that people under 30 will enjoy is the achievement of work compared to those over 30 that rise up at least 1 per

cent

higher . Followed by doing hobbies where a maximum of 25% of adults and the proportion of 22 per

cent

of their users. The other factors that were being used were nearly the same amount of how both charts were being in their different kinds of the popular things that they were able to enjoy during the past.

On the other hand

, the lowest percentage of having a good appearance was approximately 18 per

cent

they were able to enjoy their different types of

Correct the article-noun agreement

apply

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age groups that were making them feel happy and what was worth to them the most. Both the oldest and youngest amount of people

has been

Wrong verb form

were

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chosen where they were travelling and being with their families.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

211 words

7.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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